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Published: 2014-12-03 04:38:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 11976; Favourites: 605; Downloads: 38
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This is the third(3) and final part to this three(3) part series I created. I hope you all enjoy this one.As the fighting continued over this 'mysterious girl in red' over Death and Evil. It was Death who had more of a heart than Evil did because Death always seen people who came before him, trying to be reborn again! "The girl in red' sparked something in Death that was never there?.. However, Hate was watching this whole time and didn't agree with Evil's minuscule's methods on his brother, Death, so Hate took Evil, removed his giant fur coat of dead animal and human fur, tied him down on the raw surface of hell's floor and set him on fire and watched. Hate just smiled and hovered over Evil's body while he burned and laughed at him.. The endless screams from Evil was a soothing tune to Deaths ears! But Death couldn't stop thinking about 'the girl in red'.. Now that Hate has taken care of Evil, Death has a chance now to show 'the girl in red' he has a heart. A heart full of black tar, emptiness, soulless but for girl to decide, none other.. What will happen... ?
This is a mini-fantasy series. Three parts were in the making of this. Go to part one to see how it begins!: I Am Death
Edit 1: I apologize for my big watermark. I was really happy how the fire turned out and totally forgot to reduce the opacity and the size..
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I think what Kittybuu said is correct.All together the price is very good, it just needs to have a little more pop to it.Ithink maybe if you gave the dragon a deeper color, but not black,itwould be so much better.Also this my first time doing a critique so. I'm sorry if my advice isn't sufficient enough, or its lacking in any way.
Anyway,just by looking at this one piece I can tell that theirs a very deep story behind it.Keep up the good work,and you should consider making this a full time series, I'd definitely look forward to it.
Himitsu out!<3
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Hello man! I saw this and I just wanted to give you some constructive criticism.
First off, the positives. The colors go quite well together. The warmth is quite attractive and it caught my eye as I was browsing through DeviantArt. You did a rather good job with the anatomy and overall making a quite terrifying creature. The lighting and coloring is also done quite well. You have a definite light source, which most beginning artists seem to miss out on.
Now, let's talk about what you could do to overall improve. The way you seemed to make the fire is just so solid. I would understand if it was a stylist choice, but it kind of messes up the overall feel of the picture when everything else seems to look realistic. You can't really tell where the monster ends and the background begins in the drawing, this can leave a disconnect within the drawing. The burning body in the front (thats what I assume it is) doesn't really seem to have an accurate light source for it being on fire. It would be more light up. Overall, you did a pretty good job though. Keep up the good work!
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One last thing! It looks like you've used the smudge/blur tool quite extensively. While it goes well with the drawing at hand, this is not really a good way to blend colors in most cases. It makes the lighting look unnatural.
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I'm not really into dark stories but this one was really good. Although I haven't read the other 2 parts I can already tell what some of the characters traits are.The emotional ambience in the scene was obvious even though not a word was said about it. The story itself was well written, and although there were some minor grammar errors it did not take away from the story's flow. The art is amazing too. It captures the nair scene in the story and adds a little bit more to it's ambient emotion. So in short I like this story I really like the art and you should keep doing what you're doing. And in really short terms, you should write a book.
-Z.E
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A very daunting piece overall. I think the decision to make the body of the beast in less focus than the head was a good choice, it allows the viewer to imagine what the rest of the creature might be. However, perhaps consider adding some further definition between the head and the cliff, it's a bit difficult to make out that they're not attached.
The head itself is very fearsome - broken fangs, the literal bare-bones of a nose, and the glowing eyes make up the stuff of nightmares.
I think that perhaps the right-hand side of the creature's head could be more defined, as well as the edges of the fire.
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Vision: "Hate" completely destroying "Evil". It's a solid vision with a decent concept of 'Rule of Thirds'. It's dynamic with "Hate" coming out of the distance shielded by smoke and ember. "Evil" consumed and apparently being destroyed from the inside-out by flames which is most often associated with hate/hatred/anger.
Originality: The battle of Good v.s Evil, Creature v.s Mortal, Dark v.s Light is a common theme in religion, art, basically every part of everything that exists today. In that sense its a long-time favorite so you have to think 'what sets this apart from everything else covering this topic'? Which you did with "Death v.s Evil" which a lot of people combine, rather than view them as two separate entities. Plus it's a struggle of Dark v.s Dark which is always a good twist.
Technique: You know your way around digital medium, that much is evident. Now that you have the basics its time to define your shapes/shadowing/perspective. Give us more details of the background, give us more details of "Evil". It's hard to connect to a character that is blurry/undefined. Show how the damage to his body is manifesting in detail (ie; cracks, burn marks, skin melting, etc).
Impact: Overall it leaves a very large impact. The scene is moody, vibrant in evil/death/flames, and is evident that there is a shifting of power between one character and the next. It leaves a very intense feeling, like witnessing something that you shouldn't be. Overall it's a great piece, now it's just time to fine-tune it!
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This nicely, I love that great artwork to represent hatred very creative seriously is truly inspiring thousand respects because it was the best way to represent something sincerely congratulate you on your effort and creativity.
There was no better way to represent hate and if you look closely you see that is something scary and unreliable at the same time.
And I loved so much you save in this very, very beautiful drawing seems real to the effects, how to design everything is very beautiful
resourceful and creative
Mil respect for you
Original ART!
-Pingukasane, 12-5-14 10:58 pm Mexico, Tamulipas.
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Your piece has a solid composition, the eye is drawn instantly to the face of the beast and is redirected by the light cast by the flames onto the poor guy who's probably dead by now.
The effect of the blur around them is aesthetically pleasing, it also achieves the sensation of being in a furnace, the steam around the viewer and the heat distorting some objects. Sometimes the blur could be a tad bit overloaded on the left side, near what looks to be an arm and maybe a bent leg (?). Perhaps adding some minor sharpness in certain bits and pieces might give it the there-is-steam-but-steam-moves-around-so-we-get-some-visibility effect, that could give your work more balance and make it even more dramatic, giving it much more impact.
As to the beast, I feel like the ambiguous appearance of it makes it more frightening and creates a chill towards the unknown, so I'd have to disagree with KittyBuu22's opinion.
Anyway, I am in awe. It is amazing and powerful and aaahh... I love it.
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This is indeed an amazing piece of art..! It tells what's happening , its very well focus on that the lighting its obviously well done has good contrasts ,you can really feel the persons struggle and pain quite amazing the technique .
I only gaved 4 starts because the monster isn't that original anyone can think of that design you could work in a scarier face or something..
background too should be more worked kinda shows laziness hope you aren't that.
But the rest its really amazing work I wouldn't have done better! ^^ hope you keep up the good work bbye! :3 poor
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Thanks for getting in touch for a review, I'm happy to provide my thoughts. Everyone has a different style, so these comments are obviously in the "take it or leave it" category.
Positives: I think the overall objective of a fantasy piece like this is to create the feeling of the thing we are seeing.. Is it evil? Is it frightening? YES. Right off the bat the impression is of danger and fire and heat and an aggressive beast. The color pallette is perfect, and it's all dark and scary, like he's emerging out of the dark. His glowing eyes are really cool, and draw focus to the face, which is perfect. You have also thought about lighting source, as we can clearly see where the flames are casting light on the face.
Suggestion: I can see you have done a lot of "smudging" and blurring, I assume in Photoshop. This helps with the heat and smoke effect, but can make the overall image look too smooth and almost blurry. This piece would reach a new level if you added a couple more details to the skin of the beast.... Reference a crocodile or a lizard or something and look at their bumpy or cracked skin and add that level of detail (example: some bumps on the skin, shaded with the same lighting theory).... It would add more definition to the creature and not look so digitally stroked. Also, on the left, I assume that's his arm? A few more details in there would help define it, as well in the rocks under where the flames are blasting out. A few more defined detailed on top of what you have smoothly painted would make it stand out more. (another example is his nose and eyes, where you have done a few hard lines to define them, that is a great example of where you have that level of detail)
Overall it's got a cool factor, great job!
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This is done quite nicely! I see what you're going for based on the bit in the description. The part in which Hate is burning Evil.
You really do get the impression of a strong fire taking place with some sense of emotions from agony to hatred.
I think that perhaps the teeth could have been just a little bit more defined on Hate in certain places, and it would improve him slightly. I understand there's a smoke coming out of his mouth, but just a little extra tooth definition after the bottom front left one would assure people that he does have teeth there.
All in all, I like how this is done. The use of lighting and color is pretty good. Keep up the great work!
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Critique-
This picture truly shows the most dramatic part of the story displayed in your description. I very much like the way this "Hate" character blends into the background, showing how thick the air with fire and smoke, only partially illuminated by the fire of the burning character "Evil". Though Hate's expression doesn't look as angered as I would have imagined, or depicted him to be (but that's my personal taste), He definitely does look sinister, with his flaming eye, large jaw with big teeth, and fire in his mouth. I also love the fire effects you did, even adding the embers floating away and fading.
Rating-
Vision: Again this piece gives a physical picture to the main point of the story behind it showing Hate's ... "feelings" toward Evil.
Originality: I gave this 5 stars mainly because of your description, the story behind this piece is what made me decide that this is an original piece.
Technique: The way you blended the colors and shades truly makes the piece, so much can be complemented on.
Impact: in the end this piece shows the intensity of the moment perfectly.
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My apologies but i cant make a critique in english because doesn't express my thoughts like i wish, so here's my impression of your work... in spanish e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Creo que la mejor parte de esta obra es que logra capturar fielmente la esencia del odio; y qué mejor forma de representarlo sino a través de una oscura entidad, consumida por el ardor de llamas infernales! Es el mayor logro que puedo observar... puedo sentir como la obra representa esa emoción.
Sin embargo, debe haber en esta critica un aspecto negativo y siento que esa parte corresponde a la ausencia de un espacio de fondo que apoye a la figura central del rostro. Si bien hay cierta armonia en las llamas creo que puede mejorar ese aspecto, se deben trabajar en el futuro los detalles con mayor minuciosidad.
A parte de eso no siento mayores aspectos negativos. Además toda falla es una oportunidad de mejorar y creo que llegarás increiblemente lejos, ya que tu técnica es muy muy buena.
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I believe that this piece is beautifully executed. It is the perfect blend of colors, with a wonderfully crafted scene of the fire that burns in us all. I like the way it shows the metaphorical monster wrapping itself and engulfing everything in sight, the way that hate tends to do if left untamed for too long. The vision is very good, however, I've seen many pieces like this, although not crafted this well. It sort of gives a hellish feel to the entirety of hate, which to be honest, is true. Hate IS hell. Great Job! You did good.
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The first thing that strikes me is the fire and the monster's eyes. I am always drawn towards a glow in darkness, so this piece really catches my eye. I also like the fact it's hard to see the person at the bottom. It makes me think "who is that?".
If I were to be picky about anything, I would make lines more defined and crisp. I think defining the teeth more would really increase the impact that this piece has and really increase the feeling of fear that you get from looking at this creature.
Other than that, I really love the theme and imagery portrayed. I say a job well done. I have a hard time with digital painting and couldn't imagine being able to do anything near as good as this! Keep up the awesome work! c:
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I think this is another incredible piece . The emotion captured with the victims face being nearly soul siphoned from him as the darkness this fiery fate condemning him.
having looked at it in a closer view and panned back out , I think the only thing missing from this as a full composition is that orange and yellow refracted light on the left side. It seems as a hand is coming in the shadow as well. The villain portrayed has a nice glow from this very vivid fire in his face maybe light highlights of that light in a softer tone to bring forth the already sustained light on that side . The impact was almost fully there for me but as I look more I ask : Is it a Dragon, Demon , or just Sheer Horror in Darkness. Other than that I think this is my favorite piece yet!!!! Such a grim outcome for that poor soul haha!! Thanks for Sharing e.deviantart.net/emoticons/k/k… " width="40" height="25" alt="
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To be honest this is nicely drawn, the affects are very good, though i would say that the vision on it is kinda fuzzy, and maybe if you added to the in flamed guy some melt type of drops, but other than that i would rate this fairly,cause it's way more better than i could ever make but i hope my rating is fair,nicely done~
lol since i have to write more than 100 words i'll start rambling....
school sucks right?
uggggghhhh...
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.........Hey know whats kewl one of my friends last name is Anderson!
have a great day~
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I think it is meant to be blurry to add effects :V
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Hey did you have a good time at Disney world? I went there when I was like 5 or 6 and I almost pissed my pants. Heh yeah. 😗
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yeah! i threw up! OwO
oh! oOo good times ewe
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it seeks the truth! [wow i got another shot ;w;]
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Amazing art and the impact of the entire thing was very outspoken. I love the technique and design you put into the flames and teeth of the creature. It's also good that you used your own idea in the artwork making it unique and original which is what people look for in art these days. Though the flames in the humans eyes and mouth look a little sketchy are still alright but maybe out more texture into the flames. The mist around the creature are also very good and realistic which again creates a unique technique and impact in the artwork.
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For this is hard to describe how the fire feel makes me as I was there,.
The lighting is very much shows textures on to the flame and the skull.
To the skull very much remind me of death that sent shivers down my
spine on how creative you were on the art work.
Also the flame reminded me of a great friend who was bright and strong
and the quality you did wonderful perfect shadowing and lighting and
how the title did gave me a great concept of what you provide onto
devainart. For this art deserves a 10 out of 10.
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I love the over all feeling of the story this image makes. nice vibrant colors that blend very well together. though in some parts its blurry were I think if bold the out lines more then the fire wouldn't blend into the background or the person, making it more 3-D. I think that you should have made Hate? Is that who it is?oh what ever moving one the fire breathing one more detail so that your focal-point becomes more of a focal-point. The same thing with the burning person. um yeah other then that I like it you did very good job.
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OK that is cool. I think that the way you created Hate partly in shadow makes him more sinister but I like it that way. I really like fantasy style things like this and Lord of the Rings. How did you do this? is it a painting or is it pixel art? no matter what it is I really like it. if you need any more critiques I am happy to do more and I will have more deviations soon. So thanks for the watch the faves and the llama. I will definatley be seeing more of your art. see ya.
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Wow, this piece of artwork is amazing! I don't see anything wrong with it. It kind of reminds me of Hexus from Fern Gully: The Last Rainforest. The colors are wonderful. It doesn't look rushed, and the lighting and fire are perfect. It also gives off the hateful/evil feell that the title indicates. The skull looks loke it's trying to consume something. The smoke you did was also a good touch. The teeth look old and rotting, which helps the skull look like it's been held back for a long time. You, my friend, are a very good artist. Well done.
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This is very good, I love how you used the detail and the story I'd very neat and not jumbled up all over the place. This is also a great topic that you chose. I also like how almost anyone can just picture this whole thing in their head as they read. I also love the picture. The blur, in my opinion, gives off a really creative and cool effect to the picture. I also like how well the picture was done. One thing I would do is more detail.Great job, keep up the great work, good luck in the future e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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This isn't my area of expertise, but I think that I could be of some help. Both my parents are in the design business (Mom has been doing graphic and web design for 18 years and my dad does game design)
I think that if you make the edges a little darker on the dragon (assuming it is a dragon) it will make him pop more. Not in solid black, but just solidify the edges slightly. draw attention to the main focus of the picture. At the bottom jaw of the beast you have a defined outline. Also, add more to the monster. You can't tell what it is really. A dragon? The Devil? I love the concept, but it needs more so people can see what you see in your eyes. Maybe wings or horns. A body would be very helpful in general.
Do the same thing next to the right eye.Same thing with what I'm assuming is a cauldron or flaming rock/fireball. It's not really clear what it's exactly supposed to be. Maybe add some more detail to it. More definition. If it's a rock add some lumps. If it's a cauldron add a handle to it; fireball, some glowing cracks that show the fire within.
You should probably define the background some more so we can tell where he is exactly. In a volcano or Hell (looks like somewhere with a lot of fire). You seem to have a lot of smoke so if you can, do a simple sketch (nothing to detailed) of something like a cave wall behind the smoke.
Outside of these small details I think you did an amazing job! This type of art is something that I look at in awe and would love to do one day myself. The color scheme is great and the lighting is wonderful. Keep up the good work!
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I really like this series and the story that goes with it. Love the way they trade the mistery for violence/action as they progress. I know it's not easy but I think it would be actually perfect if it was a little longer, perhaps in 5 parts or so, not more but enough to allow the themes to develop more.
About this particular part, I really like the art direction. Obviously the colors match the setting but I think the way you painted it also works well to transmit the feeling of heat (in both literal and figurative way). The character design is also good and the hatred is well portrayed in the assailant's countenance.
On one last note, if you haven't already, you should check out my favorite painter, Francisco de Goya, as I think the way he depicts "dark" subjects is simply amazing e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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I´m sorry I didn´t say anything before
Well I really think this is awesome!!! It´s like it´s devouring someone and in some way that´s what hate does! It consumes someone little by little!!
Great work!! Keep going!!
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Sorry I'm late. This is really some hate conjuring up in this piece. Beside the series, and storyline, do you see this as being "what hate looks like" to you? If so... then waw.... you are extremely vivid. Awesome artwork!
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www.youtube.com/watch?v=GtjuSP…
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Hi. Sorry for the late reply. You asked for my opinion over your work, and I'll focus on the prose rather than the image artistry. The painting is great for starters... definitely a lot of work put into it, and that will get you places for sure if you can keep up with that level of determination.
The prose however, that is another thing... and having taught English for over seven years, well, here is my honest grade: you've got a lot of work ahead of you. Please take this as my effort to help you improve, as I would not have taken the time to write this otherwise.
First, your two initial sentences are fragmented. Also look at the first sentence -- should you start it with "As..." or would it be stronger if you did away with the word?
So the grammatically correct way to put it (without altering your artistic approach) would be:
As the fighting continued over this 'mysterious girl in red' over Death and Evil, it was Death who had more of a heart than Evil did. (deleted because) Death (had) always seen people who (had come?) before him, (people) trying to be reborn again!
Ok, lets stop here and get some more pointers: watch your sentence tense. You want to write with the same tense. Obviously there are some cases where you will write in another tense to indicate the timeline of events i.e.: when one event happens before another etc. Try to avoid using the perfect tense unless you are British LOL. Funny coz I say that after having just completed my last few degrees from British/Australian institutions (you'll see I still spell with "ou" and "s instead of z" if only my stupid spellchecker will leave my spelling alone!!). You can confuse yourself if you try fancy perfect tense. Only use it if necessary. Normally we use the perfect tense to indicate a timeline of events that have happened in the past. It's complicated. Don't make me expand on this here!
To keep things simple, I would suggest writing in present tense -- like you are telling a story to someone around a campfire. Tell it as it is. That will get people more involved in your story. By doing this you will avoid using perfect tenses unnecessarily.
OK, next up: ambivalent sentences: Death always seen people who came before him, trying to be reborn again! -- In this sentence, who is trying to be reborn again? Is it "Death" or "the People"? There are ways we can avoid conflicting ideas like this and punctuation plays a HUGE role, however, in some cases not even all the punctuation in the world can save a sentence, and ultimately the sentence may need to be re-worded a bit. So with previous corrections in place we have:
Death always sees people who come before him -- people trying to be reborn again!
Again, you might say "Well OF COURSE we're talking about the people, dummy!", but unless the reader has read every page and sentence before this, the idea doesn't stand by itself. Hence the conflict.
Going DEEPER however, we might improve on the sentence more:
Death, ever-seeing and ever-knowingly, is familiar with all that come before him -- those that wish to be re-born again!
I threw in a couple adverbs there to beef it up, and I used hyphenation to iron things out grammatically.
Ok, this is just the beginning. I do apologise as I need to be somewhere else and I've just spent the last hour studying your work. Hey -- I took the time, see! I really wish I can finish my review, but then I'd have to re-write the books that are already out there.
Instead, let me just end this with some advice to help you out: Read more. Simple but true. Here's the thing, I'm not trying to be a know-all dick too. I am NOT a good writer myself! (<-- proof right here) I had a hard time getting my thoughts and ideas together back when I was doing my formal education. I had a hard time making statements and backing those statements up with references. Oh gee, please don't make me reminisce!
What's important is that you carry on, you're on the right track -- just keep at it and you WILL be better. I can definitely see you becoming better than me, and I've seen a LOT of people become better than me -- so I am not BS-ing when I say this. But you do need to read more. What should you read? Just about anything I guess. I'm not a reading expert!! If I were I wouldn't have had such a hard time with my thesis!! But what I __did__ discover when I was doing my degree was that it was MUCH easier to get my thoughts and stuff together when I read things in advance.
Now creative writing, obviously, is different from academic writing. The tense-and-punctuation practice is there however. So read whatever you like to read, but pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation. Don't just go and buy yourself a Big Book of Grammar and start reading that. That's boring stuff. I sure didn't! The reason I am such a grammar Nazi is because I TAUGHT THIS STUFF TO ESL LEARNERS FOR 7 FRIGGIN' YEARS and boy, did __I__ have to be creative in order to keep those kids from falling asleep! That was a LOT of years to improve on my own grammar!
So my simple advice is just that: Read, read, read. News articles, online forums -- with 'professionals', not 'YouTubers' (I learned a LOT from an online teacher-forum with expats bitching about life in Thailand.. LOL) -- stuff that gets edited by an editor is usually your best bet in learning what's right and what's wrong.
Other than that, my other advice is to keep up the good work : ) !!!
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edit: LOL at me not doing my homework -- I just realised that you hail from the UK. My apologies mate!
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I love how to me it seems the hate is consuming him. Great piece!
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This is totally different from my own style but it looks really cool, the blur has a nice effect.
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I can feel it! * 0 * I like a lot.
Puedo sentirlo! *0* me gusta mucho
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Thank you! I'm so glad you like it, hehe!
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