Pevlita [2016-04-19 12:16:08 +0000 UTC]
*Ranting ahead!*
I've seen your OC on Tumblr, and... Uh... I didn't actually like him? He doesn't strike me as very original nor balanced. He doesn't give me the 'ooh!' feeling. Nope.
At first - forced crossover. No, really. What? Pokemon? Royal Guard has no pokemon, and the Anthro Mudkip is a very bad idea. He doesn't fit in the UT universum.
Second - ripoff. No. Noppity nope. Personality is mostly Undyne's, and many similarities are forced. His home, weapon, attacks. Also, how am I supposed to move through orange spears while I'm frozen in place? This doesn't work!
Third - Shipping. Shipping a LESBIAN with a MALE... Is just gross. Also, the whole 'vice-capitan' thing is just more stuish.
Fourth - Determination is an instant 'warning, ooc mary sue/gary stu!' alarm. The reborn form is... Well. Not good.
I tried to make something like Gary Stu Points, but he got 28/20. Sorry.
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