Comments: 28
sinister-progeny [2017-11-14 06:13:38 +0000 UTC]
Amazing! Thank you for sharing. Congrats on the DD.
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LostGryphin [2017-11-13 22:31:21 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for sharing your work! Congrats on the DD.
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Lemonclarinet63 [2017-11-13 20:38:56 +0000 UTC]
For me, this was a bit disturbing, but I couldn't stop reading it. You gave really good suspense and introduced the characters nicely. The Gothic revenge idea reminds me a little bit of Poe, who's one of my favorite authors of all time. Great job and congrats on the DD!
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MercenaryBlade [2017-10-10 17:02:39 +0000 UTC]
Nicely done this made me think of Film Noir with monsters! You paint a vivid but depressing world here.
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MissAddledMiss [2017-10-10 02:28:07 +0000 UTC]
This is a brilliant story. The opening lines instantly drew me in and I loved the bit about those ceremonial machetes. (Living there seemed like a frightening prospect for anybody!)
I also really like the amount of detail about the dynamics of this world between all the creatures that inhabit it. There was something really reminiscent about those old rogue cop narratives seeking out justice for a past wrong made all the more intriguing by the creatures that now rule it. It was fascinating seeing the power structures that exist with the mysterious Faceless community, the lycans, the witches (really liked the nod to Blair) and demons.
My main critique is that I was a bit confused about certain details. I wasn't quite sure what the narrator was supposed to be. About halfway through, I assumed he was a lycan but I also can't help but feel I'm mistaken. This same confusion extends to the woman the narrator was searching for. Based on my interpretation, I assumed she was human since, at some point in the narrative, the main character reveals that most of her kind would either be killed or enslaved. But the narrative also states that she has lived for a good 200 years. I assume Fuzz kept her alive one way or another but still.
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LancelotPrice [2017-10-09 12:21:07 +0000 UTC]
A bizarre world of much imagination and a kind of magic. It brought me a new and interesting experience. Thank you.
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oviedomedina [2017-10-09 01:50:40 +0000 UTC]
This was fantastic read! Loved it!
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