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Meerabelle — Naruto Oc- Mottomokirai

Published: 2016-04-18 12:43:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 883; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 0
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Description So i recently revisited my old Naruto oc and i was, so to say, disgusted. I decided to completely scrap her and create a new one and so it is i present to you Mottomokirai also known as The Supaida (Spider). I haven't fully developed her but i'll put down what i've got so far and add more as i develop her more. 

I would LOVE some feedback as i haven't done much art for almost 6 months and would love to know what you guys think. Also for any fellow naruto fans out there, tell me what you think and tell me about your oc! I'd love to meet other fans.
I'm thinking of writing a fanfic for her at some point too.

Media: copic markers



Character info:
Name meaning: literally extreme hate
Nickname: The Supaida (this is what she's known as)
Age: 21 (in artwork)
Gender: Female
Height: 170 cm without heels, 180 cm with
Weight: 60kg
Build:Curvy 
Bloodtype: 0
Affiliation: Pain (former)
Current Ninja Rank: N/A
DOB: 21 December
Zodiac Sign: Sagittarius
Village of Birth: Amegakure
Element: Fire
Profession: Sellsword
Likes: Poison, classical music, bitter food, swords, her hair and nails, immortality
Dislikes: Naive people or people who are stupid and do not realize

Personality: Cold, calculating, full of bottled anger and hate, manipulative, a good liar, very protective of her hair due to it being the key element of her technique

Friends: N/A
Enemies: Numerous, but none in particular
Idols: Mottomokirai looked up to Itachi, admiring his ability to cold heatedly kill his whole clan with no remorse (like most, she was unaware of the truth) and she greatly admired the seven swordsmen due to the swords they wielded



Weapon of Choice: 
 A long black sword which is what she most commonly uses. She also uses her nails and heels if needed. 
A poison designed by Sasori which she coats her sword, heels and nails in. it causes extreme hallucinations and those infected are forced in a state in which they face their worse fears and weaknesses.
Battle Strengths/Weaknesses: 
Mottomokirai uses a technique called Ke u~ebu gijutsu (Hair web technique) in which she uses her chakra in her hair, giving her the ability to manipulate it and use it almost like tentacles. She rarely uses it due to the amount of chakra required and the strain it puts on her. Because of this technique and the poison she coats all her weapons with she is often referred to as the spider. 
She is best at Kenjutsu and its what she almost always uses. She is also skilled in Taijutsu and can revert to ninjutsu (her specialized technique) if necessary, although prefers not to due to the consequences (it is both her strength and her weakness) 
 


History: 

Mottomokirai grew up as an assassin in Amegakure where she developed her technique and at the age of seventeen worked directly for Pain and Konan during his leadership, completing missions in exchange for the poison he acquired for her from Sasori. After Sasori's death and at the age of 19 she left and became a rogue/missing ninja due to Pain being unable to supply her the poison she required. She then converted to becoming a sellsword, working for whoever could supply her with poisons she could work with. At some point she was hired to assassinate Hidan but was, for obvious reasons, unable to succeed. She managed to escape but became interested in Hidan and his religion.
When she heard of Akatsuki and Pains downfall she felt anger that her old employer/boss had been killed, having looked to him as somewhat of a god-like figure, despite her later betraying him and despite him barely acknowledging her existence. She also decided to go and dig up Hidan, planning to rebuild him and learn of how he achieved immortality. 



This is a very rough draft and i am probably going to change it a lot over time, but for now it'll give you a rough idea.
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Comments: 14

Ko-No-Chi [2016-06-24 02:57:04 +0000 UTC]

Hi, I'm here from ProjectComment !

The first thing I want to say is that I think you've done an amazing job at drawing, colouring and shading her clothes! The folds in the cloth all look very natural, and the shadows really give the image some depth. However, I feel like her skin, and especially her hair, could use some more, darker shading in certain areas. For the skin, I think a thin shadow would be cast on her legs and torso by the clothes she's wearing in the smaller drawing. The chin also often casts a fairly dark shadow on the neck. As for the hair, the areas under her chin, around her neck, and a small area around her body are probably the main areas you'd want to consider particularly darker shadows. The undersides of the strands of hair, might also be somewhere to consider more shading. Adding some lighter areas for highlights could also help give the effect of depth, and I imagine if she is protective of her hair, she would probably take good enough care of it that it would be pretty shiny when hit by light.

The only other problems I can see are that in the larger drawing it looks (to me, at least) like she's missing her left ear. Since her hair is flowing out to the left, and lifted away from the side of her face, you'd probably be able to see her ear which would normally be hidden. Also, she doesn't appear to have much of a grip on her sword at all. I'm guessing the reason for this is her long nails, but since she seems to be seated, you could have the sword point-down on the ground with her hand resting on the pommel. If not, then her fingers should probably be wrapped around the sword's handle.

Overall I think this is a great piece! I hope some of this is helpful!

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Meerabelle In reply to Ko-No-Chi [2016-06-28 12:21:28 +0000 UTC]

wow thank you so much for the amazing feedback! i really appreciate it
i totally agree with your points, the truth is i dont have many copics (only one shade of each colour) so i was very limited on shading with the hair and skin. hopefully i'll be able to get more soon

i never noticed that with the ear, although now i see you're totally right so thank you and the nails making the grip difficult are definitely something i need to work out, although you've come up with a neat solution.

again, thanks very much!

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Ko-No-Chi In reply to Meerabelle [2016-06-29 05:06:52 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!
I thought it might be something like that with the shading; I used to have similar problems with my coloured pencils but I find that browns and oranges can be used for heavily shadowed areas of skin and blonde hair, although it really depends on the shade of brown/orange. But I'm not sure if it would work the same way with markers since I guess pressing more softly won't change much xD

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Meerabelle In reply to Ko-No-Chi [2016-06-29 08:27:56 +0000 UTC]

it is quite a pain sometimes  
i did consider trying that, but the orange is so vibrant it would make her hair look less blonde. XD 

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Ko-No-Chi In reply to Meerabelle [2016-06-29 09:14:54 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I can see how that would happen xD

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JnMohab [2016-06-09 06:02:32 +0000 UTC]

First l like the contrast between your the image of your OC. They are quite stylish and convey with force your idea.


The color are well chosen, the hair distinctive and elegant.


The anatomy... Hum the size are not well designed. I infer that you didn't draw a skeleton of the pose to have a rough idea of the final result.


The band in the sleeve are a nice touch, quite trendy, but they have (I think) the adverse effect of marking two point of flexion. Like the arm had three section.

Overall nice work! It will be a pleasure to watch your progress

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Meerabelle In reply to JnMohab [2016-06-11 05:21:27 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much for the feedback!

i actually used some reference photos for the poses. out of interest, what parts in particular did you find were not quite right?

i never even noticed that with the sleeve, although now that you point it out i totally agree  

but again thanks for the criticism, i will take note for the future!

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professorwagstaff [2016-06-05 16:41:09 +0000 UTC]

Hello Meera,
I am commenting on behalf of .  I would like to start my comment off with what it is about your drawing that I find to be the positive aspects of it. One, I like your drawing style. It's very loose and yet still confident.  Your line work seems very strong and it helps to bring your OC to life. Two, the coloring looks great. I'm not very good at coloring myself so I do admire a good job when I see it.  I like the way you shaded her clothing. Basically using just darker tones of the same color. Looks good. Lastly the character herself looks very interesting and you've given her one heck of a history and personality.  So no shortage of imagination there.

For the negative aspects. One I'm not quite sure of the pose she's striking.  She looks like there should be a stool under her so she can sit and relax. Maybe a stronger action pose would be better. Also I see where she is holding the sword with her left hand reversed, which is fine. However, she has no grip on the sword and would appear to be holding it with her thumb only. Wrap those beautifully long fingers around that weapon.  Lastly, and this one's just a personal pet peeve, but there is no reason to put the OC's name in the drawing. You have it in the title.  It distracts from the drawing.

Overall a real cool drawing with a distinctive character done in a unique drawing style.  Keep up the good work and have a great day.

Please remember that nothing stated in this comment was meant to belittle or degrade your wonderful work.

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Meerabelle In reply to professorwagstaff [2016-06-07 09:14:17 +0000 UTC]

hey

thank you so much for the amazing feedback! It's great to hear what people like about my work, and what i could improve one (which is, of course, a lot. improvement is always possible ^-^)

for the pose, this actually started of as an entirely different drawing in which the character was sitting on a stool at a pub, before becoming something entirely different, so i totally agree with your point. i also noticed the hand, which bugs me terribly now, but at the time i wasnt sure how to work with the long nails. its something i'll have to work on.  

i love the suggestions for the name, i've actually never noticed it before. so i'll change that now

thank you again very much for the feedback!

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A-Blue-Bubble [2016-04-20 11:45:27 +0000 UTC]

Quite an improvement on the last model. Design fits into the world well, though heels are just impractical for combat and that sword thing doesn't look practical either, but minor issues. I'd also at least tie that hair back when fighting. 

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Meerabelle In reply to A-Blue-Bubble [2016-04-20 12:15:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks she doesnt move much during fighting, the heels are actually used as a weapon, same with the hair. but yer, still a first draft

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A-Blue-Bubble In reply to Meerabelle [2016-04-22 06:09:57 +0000 UTC]

incorporating them into her style gives them a reason to be there, which works. Cool

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Meerabelle In reply to A-Blue-Bubble [2016-04-22 06:11:35 +0000 UTC]

haha thanks ^_^ 

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A-Blue-Bubble In reply to Meerabelle [2016-04-25 02:30:37 +0000 UTC]

Mine neither, though my school is actually trying to be better, and managing. 

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