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Nachooz β Traveling Zoom Practice
Published: 2014-08-26 16:39:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 29878; Favourites: 1671; Downloads: 314
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Uhh... posted this on my tumblr forever ago but er... yeah... idkanyways, she's supposed to be like in some sort of vehicle and the wind is blowing in her face, if that wasnt obvious. OTL Zooming is hard. I cant seem to keep it consistent QAQ if you have any tips/crits/input, please feel free to throw them at me. QuQb Its very choppy, I know... but I think im not very good at making smooth animation orz
Frame count: 18
Tools: azdrawing2
Please do not steal/post any of my animtions (or artworks orz) on other sites QuQ You don't know how much work goes into them, thank you QuQ
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Thank you for the critique ^^ Although this is a very old animation from the time when I was just sorta "messing around" with animation so I know it's very rough with lots of room for improvement but your insight helps. I will try to keep those things in mind in the future ^^
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It's hard to critic something in animation when it's not known anything of the original briefing, and if you achieved what you wanted.
I could state that the traveling is not a smooth one since it stop in the middle and proceed, but that wouldn't be a critic, would it?
The line work is really good even if it's after the clean up, although there's some inconsistency in the line thickness, but it's little and barely noticeable.
What I could say, and I hope you take it serious, is that her few movements (i.e. head down and arm up) are happening with the same time and spacing.
This is something you shouldn't go for, you should go for contrast.
Contrast gives interest.
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Ah! Yes. That makes a lot of sense. I will try to work on contrasts in movement from now on. Orz. Thank you very much!
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No bother
Do go and see my exercises, you may like them (I hope)
Also, you may see in it a lot wrong, and if so, do say.
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First of all, this is a very good animation!
I really like the style and the lines you draw are smooth and clean. You also conveyed the emotion very well in this piece.
One thing I noticed is that the movement of her head isn't that smooth; it seems to nod at the beginning and stop in the middle. Of course, that could've been intended to draw attention to her face, but I personally think it distracts a little. A way you could do that is by just drawing the movement of her head at first.
But aside from that, you did a great job on this animation! Keep it up and I look forward to seeing more of your work!
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The head movement was intentional but now that you mention it I can see that the movement is too sudden and distracting orz|||| thank you so much. I will make use to keep those things in mind next time QuQb
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You're welcome! Glad it was helpful^^
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I love all the animation but I have to say. I dont like the zoom. I think is too fast. Compared to your other animations, which I can capture the movements, this one is fast, making it hard to capture. Specially because of the zoom. The movement of her hair is awesome. looks like my hair when I sit myself near to the window, but if she is inside the car, the hair cant move so free. But if she as no windows, like a convertible (muhuh) works pretty well. I notice her hand and arm changes a lot which confuses me. After the zoom, in mere seconds her hand...i see 4 positions I think, before she turns her face. Need to careful wih body movements. But since this was a test, and this is a critique to help you, you'll get much better than this e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s⦠" width="15" height="15" alt="
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Ah QAQ
Thank you so much <333 I was trying to work in terms of timing where it's like fast in the beginning and then kind of slows down at the end but I don't think I pulled if off very well ;;;;; but this helps QuQ thank you so much!
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You welcome
I wish I could do such thing hehe. I mere do simple animations with simple design xp
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i love this animation, what programs do you use?
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This one is one of my favorite animations you have made
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Love the Animation can U do some 4 me if I commission U for some points?
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No, sorry. I don't take animtions commissions at the moment ^^
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your animation is so flow awesome !
I love your ability to zoom, crop, rotate, and wind effects on her hairΒ
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As do I, my friend...
Why do I sound like an old movie? xD
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only 18 frames? hey man I think that's really cool!
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very good drawing . can I use it with Rainmeter ? Thank you.
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Honestly, I'm still learning myself QuQQQ
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i just love ur work
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Your key drawings are very nicely done! Β But there's some little issues with the motion that could be worked out.. Β For example, the zoom pops forward somewhat abruptly, then hits those held drawings of her close-up pretty hard and hangs there a little awkwardly. Β There's also some popping going on with her hand on that held portion of the zoom as well that could use some smoothing out. Β It's very close, though! Β A couple tweaks could really go a long way.
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Ah. I see!! Thank you so much QuQ
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i feel like the song "Hey ya!" by Outkast is playing while I'm watching this,Β
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My first guess was a train XD.Β
But this is cute anyway <3~~.
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That's kinda what I has in mind too ^^
Thanks~
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Lawl!!!! I try to do animation with the least amount of frames possible orz.
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any tutorial about animation?
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