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Published: 2006-07-31 04:23:35 +0000 UTC; Views: 392; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 4
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This is no call out to a Romeo.No plea to a Juliet.
Wherefore art thou so obsessed?
Thou holdest a secret rose in thine hand...
And call it compassion?
No. This is not compassion.
Compassion is no flower, no blooming romance,
Plucked idly in a field--
Full of wild lusts and infatuations,
Loves, friendships and otherwise. No.
Compassion is not In that field.
For it IS that field.
That garden, where both good and evil thrive.
And the flowers are too plentiful to pick, one by one.
They are taken in as a whole,
Cared for by the invisible hand
Of a watching gardener.
Compassion.
It is in those hands which sowed the field.
Not the single, velvet petal...
On a rose that's doomed to fade.
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this is a good poem. the illustrations with your words are bright.
"They are taken in as a whole,
Cared for by the invisible hand
Of a watching gardener."
was particularly my favorite part.
in the essence of compassion,
i notice the more you know about the society around you,
and the more you work towards their betterment,
the harder they will work for you.
i suppose i'm just a "born leader" but
i understand the concept enough
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Thanks for the nice comment, I agree with you about compassion. The more you show it, the more you receive it from others..yay altruism! And even if you don't get it back, you sure feel good anyway.
I'll stop by your page as soon as I can-- I'm really busy with school right now though, so it might be a while.
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that's totally ok! i know how it is to be busy with schoooool. i'm a massage therapy student and i have a hard time finding anything to get my mind off school. but i definitely love what i'm going to do for the rest of my life, and i hope you will too! don't lose sight of your dreams, stay true to yourself... peace.
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Words with truth in them. It's great to see other peoples point of views. Im not much of a criticizer unless there's something that really sticks out. and I like this a lot. ^^
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no one can critisize ur work, you may as well ask them to critisize ur soul. (kinda mushy but i feel its true)
And for the record I thought the poem was pretty damn fantastic.
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Mmmm. Souls are criticized a lot more often than it seems like, so you see...if that's what they are doing by criticizing my work...it's pretty normal. <3
But thanks for the kind words. ^^
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i love it, especially the ending, very catching. and a great idea too
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VERY nice. I wasn't positive where you were going with it at first, but I think it was well designed in that respect. Bravo!
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Wow... This is really beautifully written. I love it. It's very different from that depressing little piece of insanity I read at the talent show
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Aw. But that wasn't depressing. 
And I read this at the talent show.
Maybe no one heard me. >>
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You read this one at the talent show? If you did, I was too busy trying to decide what the hell you were doing with an accent XD
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Ahhhh. No, i read it after the accent poem.
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the use of the informal is interesting in the beginning. however, it falls out mid-sentence, early on. i don't know if that's "good" or "bad;" in fact, i think that stopping mid-sentence sets up the rest of the piece to be naturally "formal." m'kay... i guess that sounded strange... but i'm not sorry if it does...
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mmm. So did I happen to change from informal to formal in the right amount of time, or is that something you think I should try?
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well, "your hand" was a formal phrase in an otherwise informal sentence... i don't think it hurts the piece, but try looking at it with "your" replaced with "thine." i don't know if you'll like the fully informalised sentence more than the partially formalised one that you already have.... wow. just never mind... i is crazy pants!
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Shoot. I didn't even notice that. Thank you. <3
Thou holdest a secret rose in thine hand...it sounds one hell of a lot better. 
*hugs*
You no crazy pants. Though if I had some, I'd send you a pair of the wild n crazy pants I wore when I was a child. On that note...I think I want some new ones. They were neon green and blue...and awesome. lots of diagonal lines...
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