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Rainbow-Acey [2016-08-29 15:33:22 +0000 UTC]
jeeze though, murder is still a bit much, even with all the other serious themes in this story. These guys seem like...good guys for hire, if you'll excuse the blanket word 'good'. So not particularly so 'good' at all.
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Willdabeast-0305 In reply to Rainbow-Acey [2016-08-30 01:08:30 +0000 UTC]
The thing about Retribution is that they don't fit a moral binary. Their goal is to save the world by stopping the villains that the law can't reach. But they do that through assassination. Some times, a villain has to be dealt with in order to save lives. But other times-- arguably most of the time-- it's not the right course of action. In this story, they are clearly the antagonists. But there are probably other times in which Retribution were the heroes trying to stop a terrible evil. The blue-haired guy, for instance, seems like a pretty good guy (at least somewhat), but Alpha Leader is willing to beat an innocent man and use him as an unwilling weapon.
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Willdabeast-0305 In reply to Rainbow-Acey [2016-08-30 19:21:15 +0000 UTC]
Huh. Well, there is only once instance (I believe) where a masculine pronoun. I don't see why there wouldn't be female members of Retribution. I could just go back and edit that one bit... Or maybe not.
Fun fact: "Delta One" was originally going to have an Australian accent, but then I thought it'd seem kind of random.
I did hesitate to post this chapter, since it felt a bit out of place considering the generally light-hearted tone most of the rest of the story has. But 1) I needed to conclude it somehow or it'd never get finished and 2) it's probably okay if the story's climax is more intense than the rest of it. I mean, it is the ending. And you don't want to end weak, right? Maybe I could have come up with a better last chapter, but it is what it is. I can always write more about this world later (and I most definitely will, one day).
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Willdabeast-0305 In reply to Rainbow-Acey [2016-08-31 16:02:35 +0000 UTC]
Random accents are pretty cool. After all, one of the main themes of Hero's Dilemma is diversity in characters, as if they were chosen at random from the general population-- that's why there are characters of various races and body types. And that would include different accents. But in this specific instance, I found that trying to give him an accent felt weird somehow. It just didn't work.
Don't worry! "Hero's Dilemma" is just the story of Paragon's life and his relationship with Sycorax. Once this story is done, I plan to write more in this universe, maybe even more about Paragon. But there are also other characters, groups, and events I want to write about, such as The Super Seven, Guardian Man, the Midnight Society, and more.
And aside from related stories, I'm still writing other stories, too. Don't worry, you're not going to run out of things to read just yet.
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