AutisticChick [2015-03-27 05:41:31 +0000 UTC]

ohmigod

i just died

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ORIGINS-LUNA [2014-11-05 19:50:13 +0000 UTC]

Love it - has a sense of adventure

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NemoX7 [2014-10-31 23:42:21 +0000 UTC]

This was a neat six word story. The use of italicising "apocalypse" gives a duality impression of whether the love expressed between the "lips" is going to have consqiences, for good or ill, in the future. Great job!

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WaKip [2014-10-30 12:55:11 +0000 UTC]

This is so neat, how you almost made it rhyme. The way you put this is so lovely as well.

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Siccio [2014-10-26 17:22:18 +0000 UTC]

ehi, these words are yours?
  you stop everything else in the mind of the readers.

good,
  -compliments.

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word-s-myth [2014-10-26 09:48:47 +0000 UTC]

I like the simple truth and witty beauty of this, and the unexpected connection created by the perfect rhyme between "lips" and "apocalypse".  And it's even better when one considers the double meaning of "apocalypse": originally, it means "discovery", "revelation", then it evolved into "disaster"; a kiss is indeed an intimate discovery which can lead, or not, to a revelation or a disaster

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IrisVilliam [2014-10-24 19:13:50 +0000 UTC]

Nice way to have an apocalypse... ^^

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primordialsea [2014-10-23 11:35:30 +0000 UTC]

That's a nice one!

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copper9lives [2014-10-21 05:28:25 +0000 UTC]

Lips to lips
Apocalypse
Sense eclipse
My mind's solipsism
Poetry causes schism.

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Hydrogenuine [2014-10-20 02:49:05 +0000 UTC]

A relationship doomed to fail, written in such a simple and yet effective way. And that careful rhyming? Gorgeous.

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