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Published: 2005-09-10 10:25:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 69; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description Two friends of  age six used to meet in front of this tree,
The tree that knows a lot about a promise between two friends.

They usually play hide and seek,
Or sometimes fly kite.

Coloring each others day,
With sweet child stories.

Then one day, six years passed they stood in front of the tree,
Hand-by-hand promising to meet each other 6 years after.

Tears trickled down the others face, evidence of fear to loose a friend,
The later gave a hanky and told the other that he’ll be back.

The one visited the tree everyday, hoping that the other will be back,
While the later never tried to forget the friend he dearly love.

The tree grew old, looks like the promise has been broken,
When the waiting lost all hope she knelt down and wept.

A beautiful man walked silently to the grieving girl,
Hugged her and told her that the waiting is over.

A promise is a promise which sometimes is hard to grant,
But the tree is the one who saw it and look hoe it stood.

A sturdy, strong and unbreakable wood,
Same as our promise the bond of truth..

And this is the story of the tree,
You and me who lived together eternaly.
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Comments: 7

XxCutxUpxAngelxX [2005-09-22 00:26:13 +0000 UTC]

This is a very nice story, it does need a bit of work, but with the right additions n such, this would be an EXCELLENT poem. I hope you find the time to better it.

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kira-chan05 In reply to XxCutxUpxAngelxX [2005-09-25 06:32:59 +0000 UTC]

oi thanx for the comment and dont worry am planning to edit my pieces just needed time you know busy from school...

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XxCutxUpxAngelxX In reply to kira-chan05 [2005-09-26 02:02:52 +0000 UTC]

yea i totally understand lol.

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lost-traces-of-hope [2005-09-15 10:47:30 +0000 UTC]

I like it, a little too happy for my taste, maybe, but I like it... If I was the guy I probably would have been waiting, all that time, on the other side of the tree, I wish trees looked over my promises... I now want to write about promises... I think you inspire me with your happiness... now to darken the tone a bit... "A promise yet unbroken” will go on in a bit

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DESP [2005-09-10 11:05:51 +0000 UTC]

I love it!

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kira-chan05 In reply to DESP [2005-09-13 11:27:56 +0000 UTC]

ei long time no chat...hope your fine there...thanx..lav ya

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DESP In reply to kira-chan05 [2005-09-14 08:52:49 +0000 UTC]

I'm fine thank you... How about u?

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